2010年1月15日金曜日

BR 1-14: Marcel and the white star


I read the book which name is “Marcel and The White Star”. I think that this book so well and funny books, so when I read this book, I became so hearty. I enjoyed reading this book very much.

This story’s main character is Marcel. He is a French mouse. He lives on the beautiful old boat in Paris. His home is the under kitchen floor. He likes old movies, reading the book and opera. I think that he is the fashionable man! I think that he has a lot of good hobbies too.

He waited at the station when he ate after the dinner. He found two strange men near there. They are thief. They stole a woman’s ring. This ring’s name is “the white star”. A woman’s name is Miss Zaza Dypont. She is big opera star, so he knows her.

After an hour later he went to her house. Then she phoned to the police, because she stole the ring. After he heard that, he went to two mens place. There were the café. They showed the ring for a lot of people. Then, Marcel picked up the ring from man. He runs over. He went to Zaza’s house. She was sleep at her bed. He put on the ring to her dresser. The next day, Zaza found the ring at her dresser. She was surprised very much and she was happy so much. She phoned the police soon. Next day, all newspaper has Zaza’s story.

I think that this story is so happy story! Please read it one time if you have not read it yet.


[270 words/total 15507 words]

BR 1-13: The White Stones


I read the book which name is “The white stones”. I read this book first time. This book’s main character is Chris Ellison. She lives at London in England. She rides the ferry. She went to Skaran in Ireland.

After when she leaved there, she walked to the stones. There are big stones and one small stone. There are nice and beautiful. There are so big too.

After that, you she found the door near the megalithic is a hill. The door is written the words. It says that, “Megalithic Tomb. 4500 years old.” She opened the door. She looked in the tomb. There was so dark. And, the story finished there. The last of this story, I am wondering that. This story was little strange for me, but it was fantastic.


[132 words]

2010年1月14日木曜日

Texas burger!

Hello. I ate Texas burger last week with my friend. Do you know Texas burger? It sells at McDonald’s hamburger. I ate it first time, because it is not cells there every day. That day was the special day, so I think that I wanted to eat it one time.
I knew it last week. My mother said that “Do you know Texas burger?” I said “No”, and my mother told me what the Texas burger is.
It was so good taste for me. My mother and friends good taste too. I want to eat it again!

[97 words]

CARE BEAR!

Do you know Care bears? I like it very much when I was high school student. Care bear is so cute. Care bear has a lot of kinds of bears.
This picture is Care bear’s stuffed animals. It gave me from my boyfriend. He got it at the UFO catcher. He tried it a lot of times, he said that. He knows that I like Care bear very much. When I gave it from him, I was so happy! I always sleep with it at night in my bed. It is so cute. I want to gather it more. If you does not know Care bear, please you watch it.

[☆110 words/ 14857 words☆]

2010年1月13日水曜日

BR 1-12: GOLD


This book is written about gold. Do you like gold? Do you know it? I like it very much, because it is beautiful and using for the money. I always put in my neck and fingers. I think that gold is using a lot of things. For example, it using for jewelry, money and more. The gold has been used by people for more than 6,000 years old. I did not about it, so I was surprised when I knew it. The gold was first used as a tool for people. After that, the gold used each thing. The Egyptians were one of the first people to use it in art.
Their art is so luxuriously. About 3,000 years age, Chinese people started to use gold as the money. Over time, all over the world’s people started to gold as the money.
The gold is finding at Peru, Ghana, South Africa, Indonesia, Uzbekistan and Indonesia. Now, the gold is also used on the outside of spacecraft, because to protect them from the heat.


[173 words]

BR 1-11: TITANIC


I read the book which name is “TITANAC”. Do you know the ship which name is TITANIC? I knew about it little. The name of TITANIC is the big ship. In the 1900s, the people were no passenger plans. If they want to cross the ocean, they had to take the ship, because a lot of people used the ship. The TITANIC was so big ship. It had 3rd class. It went to New York from Queen land. But it on the way, it crushed to iceberg. Gradually, it was sunken, and it became a sunken ship. A lot of people died at this accident. This accident was become so miserable incident. I think the TITANIC is so good ship, because this ship was so luxuriously. I want to ride it one time.


[133 words]

BR 1-10: Fashion


I read the book which name is “Fashion”. This book is written about fashion’s history.
Early hunters were not wearing the clothes. They wanted to wear the coat, because they lives so cold place.
After that, the clothes was worn a lot of each place. The silk born in China, and it exported abroad. I think that the silk is so beautiful. It made in silk is so beautiful. It made in silkworms! I do not like worm, because it is strange.
At the Europe, a lot of nobleman wore so beautiful and luxurious clothes. I like French fashion very much, because there is fashionable. The woman’s dress has so many decollations. Her head and shoes were fashionable too. I like Marie Antoinette very much. She is fashionable person, I think. She always wore so luxurious dresses. I want to wear her dress and I want to make it by myself some day.


[153 words]

Coming of The Age Day!

January 10th, I went to the ceremony of “Coming of The Age Day”. That days was Coming of Age Day. I am waited for that day, because that day I can meet a lot of friends at the ceremony.
That day, I got up at 5:30 am, so I was so tired it. Last night I slept at 2: 00 am, because I had a part time job. I could not sleep a lot of time that day.
I went to hair salon at 6:30 am by alone. I had made up at there. It had about two hours. I was very sleepy when I had been hair set. When I finished make up, I had been hair set. My hair dresser was so good person. When I had been it, we talked about a lot of things. She came to Kumamoto form Oita to help that day. I was so satisfied with my hair and make very much. It was so cute, I think.
After that, my friend and I went to the gym by mother’s car. I met a lot of friends at there. We took a lot of pictures. I was so happy and enjoyed that time.
Then, my friends Minori, Risa and I went to Suizenzi Park. I went there first time. There was so beautiful place. When I went there, I was moved. We took many pictures at there. We went to shrine too. I want to go there again when I have a free time.
Next, I went to my grand mother and grand father’s house soon with my mother by my mother’s car. I showed them my long sleeve kimono. We talked a lot of time. I went to relative’s house too. I went there long time separated. I like them very much, because they are so kind and funny. When I talk with them, I always smile. They had two dogs. It is Corry and Dachshund. It is so cute.
I went to my junior high school’s party at 7:30 pm with my friends. I was so sleepy, but I went there. This party collected a lot of people. I was so enjoyed this time very much. I ate a lot of foods and drinking. I took many pictures at there too with my friends. We went home at 12:00 am. I was so tired, so I slept soon. My age of The Day was so interesting day. I want to meet my friends again!

[☆413 words / total 14288 words☆]

2010年1月6日水曜日

My portfolio

Student ID: 08135


Portfolio for Writing IV, Section 1A OR 1C

(See: Note 1, below)

0.0. OVERVIEW

Reviews, Posts, Words, and More

(See: Note 2, below.)



1.0. ESSAYS

(See: Note 3, below.)


Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).


1.1. Showcase
Short titles with links to blog posts
Dates
yyyy.mm.dd

W
C
L
P
M
2-01a (2009.10.07)

Draft essay 1-3

2009.10.19
14
1463
0
0
0
0
2-01b (2009.10.21)

Draft Essays 1-4

2009.10.21
5
424
0

0

0

0

(2-01c)
















2-02a (2009.11.04)

2-02a:Website Reviews

2009.10.28
5
452
0

0

0

0

2-02b (2009.11.18)

2- 02b: Website Reviews

2009.11.11
5
505
0

3

2

0

(2-02c)
















2-03a (2009.12.02)

Essay 2-03

2009.12.1
3
529
5

0

0

0

2-03b (2009.12.18/22)

Essay 2-03b: English makes me happy!

2009.12.17
6
1018
0

0

1

0

(2-03c)
















Totals
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Key:
¶: number of paragraphs five (5) or more sentences in length
W: number of words
C: number of comments
L: number of links
P: number of photos or other graphics
M: number of other media included in post


1.2. Most Improved Essay

(See: Note 4, below.)


Selection and Assessment: Which of the three essays that you've written and revised this semester shows the most improvement? What did you do to improve it? Remember that complete answers are better than short answers, focus on your writing (accuracy, appropriacy, content and organization, rather than graphics or other media), and explain at least two major improvements.
  • [Please remove these remarks, including the square brackets, then identify your most improved essay, and explain ways that you improved it here.]



2.0. COMMENTS

Showcase
Short titles of posts with links
Dates of comments yyyy.mm.dd
Numbers of words in comments
Qualities of comments**
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog*
"Social Media and Social Networking Explained"

2009.10.14

25 words

too short.

2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog*
"Speaking Presentation"

2009.12.09

29 words

good.

2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog*

Essay 2-03



2009.12.09

62 words

so good!

2.4. Most comments on:
Short titles of posts with link
Dates of posts yyyy.mm.dd
Total number of words in comments
Qualities of comments**
2.4.1. Any one of your essays*

Essay 2-03



2009.12.01

5 comments

so good!

2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments?
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2009.12.16

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2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments?
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5 comments

good

2.4.2. Any of your other posts*

Long-sleeve kimono



2009.12.24

2 comments

good.

2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments?
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2010.01.13

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2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments?
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2 comments

good.











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* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes comments good.


2.5. Recent comments display

Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a sidebar, header, or footer widget? Where, or why not? Please explain.
  • I am putting on it at sidebar, because I think there is so good location. If I want to watch it, I can watch it soon. I think that there is so convenient place.

2.6. Additional reflections on comments

  • I thought that I have to write my blog more particular.
  • I thought that I have to write my blog use much words.


3.0. BOOK REVIEWS

3.1. Showcase
Short titles with links
Dates: yyyy.mm.dd
Words
Comments
Example:
2007.05.16
39
1
BR 2-01
2009.10.7
96
0
BR 2-02
2009.10.19
105
0
BR 2-03
2009.11.05
87
0
BR 2-04
2009.11.05
171
0
BR 2-05
2009.12.07
98
0
BR 2-06
2009.12.07
127
0
BR 2-07
2009.12.07
129
0
BR 2-08
2009.12.07
142
0
BR 2-09
2009.12.08
240
0
BR 2-10
2010. 01.13
153
0
BR 2-11

BR 1-11: TITANIC

2010.01.13
133
0
BR 2-12
2010.01.13
173
0
BR 2-13
2010.01.15
132
0
BR 2-14
2010.01.15
270
0
BR 2-15




BR 2-16




BR 2-17




BR 2-18














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Totals:


Note: Please calculate and list book review Totals for words and comments without including those from the example (above).


3.2. Best Book Review

Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

BR 2-9: Sheep Station
  • This book review has a lot of words more than my other book reviews.
  • This book review has a graphic.
  • This book is so interesting for me, so I wrote many words about it.

4.0. BLOG LAYOUT, LABELING, LINKING, and MEDIA



Showcase
Yes
No
4.1. Does your blog display an archive?




4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts?




4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month?




4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar?




4.2. Does your blog display a cloud or list of labels in the sidebar?




4.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately):
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  • "books" (plural) AND "reviews" (plural)




  • "essays" (plural) AND "portfolios" (plural, without "proto-")




  • "quickposts" (plural, with no space between quick and posts)




  • "links" (plural) AND "media" (plural)




  • "movies" (plural) AND "websites" (plural)




  • "brainstorms" (or "brainstorming"), "essay prep.," AND "free-writing" (or "free-writes")




4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels?




  • How many other labels have you attached to three (3) or more posts?

    • 12 other labels attached to three or more posts

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4.3. Links and media
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4.3.1. Do your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics?




  • Does your blog profile include a photo or graphic representation?



  • How many of your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics?

    • 44 posts including photos or other graphics

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4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links?




  • How many of your posts this semester include three (3) or more links?

    • 4 posts including three or more links (including this portfolio!)

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4.3.3. Does your blog include other media?




  • How many of your blog posts this semester include other media?

    • 1posts including other media

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  • What kind(-s) of media have you included in posts this semester? Please list the kinds here:
    1. ...Movies


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  • What media content that you originally produced, if any, do your blog posts for this semester contain? Please list and explain each item briefly, and add short links and dates (yyyy.mm.dd) for reference.

    1. ... This media is You Tube. When you want to watch and listen the music and promotion video, you can watch and listen them soon at there.(http://www.youtube.com/)



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4.4. Overall presentation

What have you done to enhance the overall presentation and readability of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.
  1. ...Display/ I put on there a lot of cute and beautiful pictures, because we can see my blog funny.
  2. ...Layout/ I did easy seeing layout for readers.
  3. ...Formatting/ I tried to easy formatting.



5.0. ADDITIONAL REFLECTIONS ON YOUR BLOG AND YOUR WRITING FOR IT

Please feel free to include reflections on both class work and homework, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, selections, and reflections).
  • ...I think that my class work was little hard for me, because I had a lot of class works. I had to do it using the computer, but I could not use it well. And I had not so many times!
  • ...I think that my proto-portfolios was good. I did it cecently, so I can watch it so easy.
  • ... I think that my class homework was little hard too, because I could not use a computer so well. My homework was difficult for me, but I think that I did my best.


6.0. ADVICE AND SUGGESTIONS FOR YOURSELF, YOUR PEERS, AND YOUR SUCCESSORS

  • ...I had to write a blog more many words.
  • ...You have to write so funny article.
  • ... You should make your blog easy to see .
  • ...I had to write the book reviews more than now.


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  2. Please use the same code in section 0.0 that you used to embed your proto-portfolios (PPFs) in the footer of your blog, which you should already have revised to display your 2nd (fall) semester PPF first.
  3. The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derived from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
  4. The essay selection and explanation item (§1.2, above) differs from that in the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III. Please read the new item carefully before making a selection.
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Okonomiyaki!

I went to Doutonbiri. Do you know there? There is a food shop. I went there first time. I went there with my friend Risa and Minori. We are good friend very much. We met long time separated.

We ate okonomiyaki. We like it very much. There are a lot of kinds of okonomiyaki. We puzzled a lot of time. Then we ordered three. I ordered seafood. We burned them by our self. It was difficult for me, but it was interesting for me. We ate three smells. There are good tastes. My seafood okonomiyaki was delicious, so I like seafood very much.

After dinner, we went to the hot spring. The name is “Tsukinohotaru”. There is my favorite hot spring. We took a bath long time. That day, there were so beautiful stars at the sky. We talked a lot of time at there. I was so enjoyed this time.


My proto-protfolios